Feedback from First Draft

This is the first draft of our trailer: 

To find out what we needed to change for our second draft we uploaded our first cut to YouTube and asked a couple of people what they thought. 

Positive Feedback

• What the political figure at the beginning is saying is 'powerful & convincing' and makes viewers feel 'patriotic and emotional' 
• The characters look right for their roles
• The anchorage 'what happens when internet freedom becomes internet control' looks really good with the letters being typed into Google
• The shot of Charlie watching the 'VALEO' video at the beginning links her with the video well
• The background music (land of hope and glory) to the 'VALEO' video evokes the viewer's patriotism

Creative Criticism 

• The political figure is too young and not forceful enough 
• The camera quality is poor therefore making action blurred and the colours unclear 
• The way the lines are delivered isn't dramatic enough so doesn't catch the audience's attention
• The story isn't clear and the clips don't indicate what happens
• The audio quality is bad, so the dialogue sounds less dramatic 
• The sound bridge doesn't link to the clips properly 
• The clips don't link to each other effectively or form a storyline 
• Sound continuity is poor 
• The music is copyrighted so cannot be used

Steps which we took to correct this: 

• Re-filmed some shots
• Filmed some new shots
• Edited them together in more creative ways
• Use anchorage to explain more of the narritive
• Re-filmed the 'VALEO' video with a new political figure
• Choosing new music to create more suspense